Saturday, 13 February 2010

DAILY POEM "DRIFTING.

Boat drifting
on dead calm river
windless, so still
peacefully looking inviting
as if one could walk over
and still remain afloat
like leaves running down drains
when rain falls.


Pieces of driftwood
lie still in harmony
whilst soft bubbles
rise to the surface
from a sea creature
who has lost its way from its group
drifting in from another world
another time.


Deep blue sky with large
separated puffs of clouds
dispersing as if God himself
was blowing on them in a playful mood
creating a clear sky once more.
River remains unmoved
as if in a giant basin
lying undisturbed.

Friends, this is my very FIRST attempt at free flow poetry, my imagination runs wild, sometimes creating blocks of sentences which I record and try to make sense out of, I think we all know what this poem is about, one word.."serenity" thanks for reading friends, hope you like it :)

13 comments:

  1. I like it a lot! I think you did very well and would never had guessed it was your first attempt if you hadn't told me :)

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  2. great job william! i love the playfulness of this one...the sea craeture and other worlds...just what i imagine when i sail on the water deep. keep those clouds blowing!

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  3. Serenity .. and Grace... thank you. (what I'm striving for bit by bit).. this was wonderful..

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  4. Billy you did great for this to be your first free flow. I enjoyed the pictures you painted of the sea as I read every line.

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  5. this is very admirable and dreamy poem with 1st class photo images.
    beautiful,
    very beautiful,
    the most beautiful post in the week!

    cheers,
    keep playing and winning!

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  6. *Sigh*
    Sounds like a dream William :)

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  7. Here is a Fabulous Award for you :)
    http://justthinkingloud.wordpress.com/2010/02/13/just-fabulous/

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  8. You are well on your way to having the best feeling ever when you put your thoughts and feelings into words as beautiful as you have done here! :) Wow, that was a long sentence! Have fun!

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  9. Wow oh Wow.. You always write the most amazing poems and thoughts. I wanted to jump in that picture. It is cold here and I loved seeing that blue water and sky. I saw you got a few awards at Jingle's place. Rock on my friend. That is amazing. I see you also changed your blog again.. Have a great weekend.

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  10. Billy, This is delightful~you do an excellent job with free flow poetry and should do more of it. It flows easily and gently and I love the subject. You know how much I love anything with the ocean or water of any kind. A lovely piece and a joy to read.
    Love, Helen & hugs xxxxx
    George sends his warmest wishes, as well.

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  11. hmmm.. i can just imagine the feeling of being at the beach.... so peaceful... the wind is so calming.... the music of the waves so entrancing.... :) i sooo like your poem... :)

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  12. Dearest William,
    I love the sea and
    you did so well,
    wonderful and awesome
    attempt!

    Looking forward to more
    from you, William!

    HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY!

    hugs
    shakira

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  13. "like leaves running down drains"
    I can hear music in this poem. Beautiful!!
    Gerardine xx

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